Sunday, May 4, 2008

deserted/desert

once in newborn joy
you crashed into our world
and now you are gonesea of lonely sand
but not without lush center
desert oasis

one single impression

15 comments:

SandyCarlson said...

The lush center of a desert oasis seems to me a great metaphor of hope. It brings to mind the idea that whether we realize it or not, the universe is unfolding as it should. (Max Ehrmann, Desiderata). God bless
Writing in Faith: Poems

paisley said...

the fireplace one is so sad... so much time and craftsmanship worn away with rit...

both are very beautifully done.....

gautami tripathy said...

We all have a purpose for being born. However long or short it might be. I see it this way.

pinpricks

zoya gautam said...

..two miracles of nature,(embedded in emptinessan) oasis,or an island.one watches with
wonderment the hope :'not without lush center' or the lack of it:'now you are gone',for the poets tackle both..thank u..

zoya gautam said...

..emptinessan) >emptiness) an-/thanks

gardenpath said...

There is something very sad about a homestead gone by. The first is my favorite.

one more believer said...

beautiful kuz... of time and beauty..

Billy said...

The first one is a heartbreaker, but so well done.

Marianne H. Nielsen said...

Both are beautiful. My favourite is the second one because of the hope, both from the words and the picture, which nestled in my heart.

Quiet Paths said...

These are very beautiful.

Annie said...

Dear Friend, The first one really tugged at my heart.
Annie

spacedlaw said...

I love them both in their own style. I love the second picture.

MyBellavia said...

The first one draws me in. Makes me think of so many deserted and used up places in today's world. This picture speaks for them all.

Great take on the prompt.

Noah the Great said...

Sad, but good!

storyteller said...

stunning images
of ‘desertion’ created
by your haiku here

Sorry to be visiting so late. I’m glad I didn’t miss your two because they’re wonderful! Mine’s here: Deserted
Hugs and blessings,