just as one bud
turned autumn leaf aflutter
& so your presence
chill air threatens
to invade every crevice
& so your presence
warmed sun behind
wind-driven cloud of dry
& so your presence
round seasons ply
in tangible hope espied
your fleeting presence
one single impression
About Me
- qualcosa di bello
- "qualcosa di bello"...Italian for something beautiful...God's creation is full of beauty & that is what I hope to share with all who visit on my blogging journey..."piacere"...it is a pleasure to have you visit!
17 comments:
I don't know if I'm interpreting this the way you would, but there is a tentativeness in these stanzas, a lightness that is very appealing.
I like the use of the repetitive last line as though no matter what your presence is always on your mind.
There was certainly a sense of fleetingness here. Beautifully done.
Well, you caught the prompt with this Haiku. Its beautiful in a strange way.
love-bd
Hi Ms. Di Bello, before we get very far here, it that your motorscoter on the header? I have had one, but not now.
Guess I will interpret (I always do it wrongly) is that your, first person's, presence is as fleeting as a bud, the chill air or warmed sun, or even the seasons in which there is hope of a longer period.
That way, I love it! None of us is here on earth for eons (or centuries, most much shorter--fleeting)
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BTW, our Beagle Adi (Jane) has her own profile and occasionally will write on my blog. She wants her own like Phil has.
Perhaps this December she will get it, I usually start a new one each year about then. And Adi usually gets what she wants.
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.._"a tentativeness in these stanzas, a lightnes"_"beautiful in a strange way"_
~as i read it, appears to be the (almost insecure) vulnerability of the feminine psyche.wanting to share and say so much..real nice..many thanks..
I wonder what the speaker would like to say. The imagery opens up so many possibilities. And yet there is so little time to say anything....Well done. Thanks.
Nice, what you did with the last lines works well.
I like the flow and repetition in this series - almost a mantra. Very nice!
..on a re read i can sense the spiritual undertones-'that' continuance-in the momentary [lightnes=lightness/cmnt above]..many thanks..
Hello there--
I would so dearly love to have a glass of wine and discuss this poem with you!
I get the top level of meaning, but there's a lot more there--
This is lovely--thank you for making it a living thing!
Beth
Enjoy your take on the prompt. The tentativeness struck me foremost as well. Thanks for coming by. I appreciate your comments.
very beautiful!
The repetition works wonderfully in this poem. There does seem to be a deep spiritual presence that lies beneath the words and rhythm.
I do like that repeating last line; it is very effective. I am seeing so many pictures in my mind. Thank you.
life is full of those moments...good to remember!
A beautiful poem! Thank you for sharing it.
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